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| 18th Aug 12 Ch: 6 |
Wow, what a cliffhanger! I came back to the site and decided to re-read this series and lo and behold, you added more to it! javascript:add_smilie(' ') the story prior to this was fantastically written and yet so sad when Vi died in the end. This part now is again, fantastically written and I throughly enjoy reading and can't wait to read the next part in this story. As a side note, I did also spot one or two spots where I think you meant to write Alice and you wrote Kate instead. |
| 26th May 12 Ch: 4 |
Now I wish I had proper internet access so I could give these the reviews they deserve. Your writing is exemplary, very tight, well constructed descriptions and dialogue which give me the impression you've practiced a lot, since you avoid most pitfalls that are sort of the, how to say it, unofficial rules of creative writing. And if you didn't avoid some, I wouldn't notice too much because I'm too busy liking this.  I suppose the only reason that this hasn't attracted the attention it should, is because the character(s) you're writing are a: not Buffy and Faith - since this is technically a site for that pairing (Even though you've stated this is a series of epilogues following from that awesome, huge epic you've done). The B: minor and invented characters. They're all great, well done, all with their own distinctions - but it's a cruel fact in the fic world, people expect you to use the popular characters already there, rather than introduce more. You're a talented writer, and this is a good chapter. The dream sequence at the start was disorientating, surreal, and pretty creepy - and Kate's waking up with the glock in her hand reveals a lot about her character. A character who does something like that to me is conveying mistrust, caution, introversion and secrecy. It's amazing what little actions here and there can do to shape and build a character, without outright just telling the reader. Alice's Slayer dream actually converting into physical injuries is disturbing, and an interesting twist on how a Slayer dream usually functions. You die in the dream you die in real life...? D: Kate's way of dealing with what happened to Alice is a good, confrontational way. She's doing the right thing. You've made her a fantastic character.  Anyway, gotta scoot! |
| 25th May 12 Ch: 6 |
oh my god....edge of my seat quickly became the floor...next installment please!!! I am really enjoying your writing style. and i like the voice you have given kate. but i want to know where sam finn is going to fit in! please keep it coming...oh, and there needs to be some kind of closure between kate and faith...otherwise faith just comes across as an impulsive ass...which, at the end of FDNH, we had established that she wasn't. awesome, though! all the characters are well-formed and resonate! keep on writing! |
| 18th May 12 Ch: 6 |
Excellent pacing, great cliffhanger ending. I can't wait until the next chapter. Cheers! Rosemont |
| 16th May 12 Ch: 6 |
Oh, MY........ looks like Alice may have went down the wrong rabbit hole..... Great job, as normal, you've gotten me A) invested in the characters and  on the edge of my &%$#@ seat!!!! Author Feedback: I just had a mental George Takei moment when you said that. Don't worry. This should be over in a couple of days. I know (more or less) where this is going. Too bad you don't yet  |
| 16th May 12 Ch: 6 |
Um... chapter seven needs to be posted like now, please!!  |
| 03rd May 12 Ch: 3 |
I went back and started reading your previous stories, just to indulge in your writing. Won't say much else, just gonna leave the review for those later - but damn. Impressed. Like seriously. On this chapter I liked the way you got things to play out between Sam and Kate. Both of them for their own personal reasons and demons end up in the shooting range blasting the heck out of poor defenceless targets, and naturally they're drawn to each other's pain, or seek company just to forget their own. They're both strong characters, and they both are portrayed well under your influence. Fantastic work.   P.s: mentioning moi in the authors note? *squirms and grins* if I can be even a little help for such wonderful writing, I'm glad to give it Author Feedback: Hey, if you come up with good ideas, like "why don't you actually research the characters you're writing about", I'll totally give you credit. And it really did help, so.... As for the going back, believe me when I say there's plenty there, ideally for the mocking and the ridiculing. 36 whole chapters at 3-4,000 words each, plus one previous epilogue. God have mercy on your soul. Thanks for the praise. I get kind of uncomfortable when people compliment my writing (if you haven't been able to tell), but it only seemed natural for Kate and Sam to become friends. And the weird thing is, I realized something... they're the only two people in this particular Buffyverse who are even remotely comfortable around guns. So what better way to play that up than with anger, gunfire, and inebriation? Anyway, thank you again for reading and feeding back. Support is always really useful and encouraging! |
| 02nd May 12 Ch: 3 |
this is a wonderful character study, and a very interesting friendship. That you can take two minor characters and flesh them out from where the series left them and give them depth, make them more interesting, broken but fighting to be whole, that is excellent writing. kudos. and it was sweet as well. Author Feedback: Thanks Riter! I've always liked taking "minor" characters (notably Faith) and exploring who they are and what their paths are. Because characters like Kate Lockley and Sam Finn are woefully undervalued. Thanks for the praise  . |
| 01st May 12 Ch: 2 |
Scots and Irish, meself, thus 'a colleen'. And yet again you dredge up a little used character and make her interesting enough to want to see more, which is after all the idea for any writer Oh, and 'tain't flattery when it's true Author Feedback: Welsh / Hungarian here (2nd gen Hung, Welsh came over the pond a long time ago, so that side's a little watered-down). Glad you like Kate and Sam; they're a lot of fun to write. Though not as much fun as Alice, I'll admit. And it is so flattery, because if it's not I'm going to hide under the covers forever and blush until the capillaries in my cheek rupture.  You'll get a Chapter 3 sometime soon, I promise. I'm just having trouble connecting a few moments that need to happen. But soon! |
| 30th Apr 12 Ch: 2 |
Very nice a colleen, and quick, looks like your Muse is rockin' it Don't blush, but in my clinically insane opinion you are one of the best hereabouts when it comes to characters outside of the inner Scooby circle. Bravo, ma'm'selle Author Feedback: I get the "very nice" part, and I get the "and quick" part, but the "a colleen" part confuses me, since I am not an Irish lass. Confusion! But, ummm..... . That's not something I can not-blush about. That's some seriously high praise, and I hope someday I manage to earn it. I think I like writing BnF fic because it provides a really interesting framework with a lot of room to wiggle. Sure, some characters are who they're going to be--Willow, Xander, Giles, and Buffy, primarily. And I actually have a lot of trouble finding their voices sometimes. But what intrigues me, what Joss was always terrible at, is looking outside the tiny group and seeing everyone else. Seeing what effect things had on the "bit characters" (who are usually way more interesting than the core cast. Lockley > Wesley any day of the week.). For example, if I can ever get my head on straight, I'm going to write me some Joyce fic. Because Joyce is interesting. Or Andrew fic. Or Gwendolyn Post fic. Or Gwen Raiden fic (what ever happened to Alexa Davalos, anyway?! Besides Riddick I mean.) And to my favorite wolfie.... Thanks  . For reading, for writing, for sticking with me through the long, dark months of no-muse. And for kissing my ass with sweet, beautiful flattery at every turn |
| 30th Apr 12 Ch: 2 |
Oh, this is just getting better and better! I like seeing the story from Kate's POV. She sounds like a good watcher. I like Sam, too, so I love that she and Kate are friends. Maybe more than friends in the future, hmmmm? I could live with that. Author Feedback: I hope Kate is a good Watcher. She's responsible, she's experienced, she's streetwise, and I have the sneaking suspicion that she doesn't take bullsh*t from *anyone*. As for her and Sam, last we knew Kate had a thing for Faith and Sam was married... well, widowed now.... but.... We will have to see where they go. |
| 30th Apr 12 Ch: 1 |
Really really like this! I love Kate Lockley. I love seeing her in this post-Sunnydale world, helping with the mission. Author Feedback: Thanks Dragon! Kate Lockley has always been underutilized, and after the events of First, Do No Harm, I kind of felt the need to explore her plotline. So I'm glad that you're reading and I'm glad you're enjoying. Hope you keep readin'! |
| 30th Apr 12 Ch: 2 |
I gotta say, these first two chapters are an interesting read. I'm going to be a tiny bit honest, and please don't burn me in fire, but I didn't really feel drawn to look at this fan fic at first, because the title didn't catch my eye. Sorry. *Ducks any potential fire* But I'm really glad I decided to give the fic a chance. Your writing style is exemplary. You've done research and it shows in what you mention. And I also really like how you've got Sam as a character. From the little I saw of her in BtVS (in fact, I'd watched that ep in S6 with my friend only a week ago) - she did seem like the sort of character you'd want to know more of. And I think you're like, the first person ever to use her. You're awesome. I look forward to seeing more, and I wonder what you've got in store for Kate. I really like your writing! And sorry if I seemed mean at the start  Author Feedback: Squeewockle, Mean? Seriously? I get bottles thrown at my head at work sometimes. Not liking the title? Not a big sitch. First of all, I'm assuming you've read First, Do No Harm? (I ask because if you have, you haven't left comments). If not you should stop, drop, and read that first, (and also Burying the Roses), and then things will make a shit-ton more sense. If you have read FDNH and FDNH: BTR, disregard the last paragraph. If not, you're starting this from the end. Thanks for giving my writing a chance despite an admittedly unattractive and wordy name. I appreciate the flattery, although (secret time!) I have done exactly NO research with either Kate Lockley or with Sam Finn. I just remember seeing both of them and going, Huh, those two are awesome. And the more I thought about it, the more I realized that they would be natural friends in Cleveland. I hate that she's such a background character (either She will do here), so I decided to make her / them prominent in this epilogue. You did not, in any way, come across as mean. I actually prefer (constructive!) criticism to praise, because criticism and deconstructing what *didn't* work is a lot more useful to a writer than simply praising what did. I hope I can keep you on the line for more! (Chapter 3 of ? will post in the relatively near future, as soon as I figure out how to write what's in my head onto paper). Thank you for the feedback, and I really look forward to hearing from you again! ~MBC |
| 29th Apr 12 Ch: 1 |
She's baaaaaaaaaaaack... thank gods, and with another sequel. Steady, CP system, let's not blow up here.... All kidding aside, glad to see you back, O Sable Corvid, and even nicer to see you have yet more "First..." for us. Nice little piece, waiting as patiently as possible for more, as always! Author Feedback: Come on. You think I'm ever, ever, EVER going to let this story rest? It's been almost 3 years. If you haven't figured out that this runs deeper in me than I can figure out yet... Umm.... get figuring? I don't know where this is going, Wolfie. I can't promise roses, or even updates, or a happy ending or even just an ending. All I know is, I had to know what happened to Kate after I pretty much abandoned her in FDNH Part I. So here she is, cupping a little songbird in her hands (bird? gun? same thing, right?) and trying to figure out if it knows how to fly. And then there's Faith, trying to assassinate a 13-year-old. What's up with that? Good to see you, Wolfie. It's been too long. |
| 29th Apr 12 Ch: 1 |
Loved it. Can't tell you how excited I was when I saw this post. Really enjoy your writing. You can draw me in, entertain me, and make me care even with secondary characters. Cheers and please keep posting! I'll read anything you come up with. Author Feedback: Aww, Rosemont, you make me blush I'm not that good. Honest. Good to hear from you again. How's the fam? |
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