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| 29th Jan 13 Ch: 16 |
I honestly don't know how to feel. Killing Faith....well I kinda hurt inside a little. I so want her to find redemption and her dying before she really gets a chance at it? At the same time her dying could create lots of interesting possibilities. I mean...what happens when someone dies in a dimension where there's another alive version of that person? And if they are both slayers? Would one Faith get memories from the other? Would they merge somehow? Be some sort of superslayer (that'd be awesome btw)? Would a super slayer lose control? Was Buffy, really the one that was needed in that world? Or BOTH of them(the full essence of the Slayer and not just half of it)? I really hate how cliffhangers always fill my mind with so many evil plot bunnies....and I have to wait a long time for an update. Please save my brain from those horrible creatures? Update soon yeah? |
| 26th Nov 12 Ch: 16 |
YOU KILLED HER, YOU B*TCH! I'LL KILL YOUUUUU! -lunges at you- hows that for inspiring the muse?  I spose two faith's doubled the chances of one of them dying. Honestly didnt think it would be the 'original' Faith though. Not sure if I'm sad or angry or indifferent to her death, if she is dead. Who knows what a plaguewalker does to a slayer? I hope everyone else isnt dead. Those golem things seem pretty solid so i cant see them turning to dust. Also starting to get the fact that this Angel isnt such a moaner, so that's cool. Hopefully youre still revved up for writing the next chapter.  My own muses have been nipping at the back of my brain so maybe ill be writing once again P.S. Sorry for the double/half finished review again!  I blame my over eager ipod touch. Author Feedback: *Squeaks* Noes, dun hurt meh! And yes, definitely revved up over here, to be honest, there is a few ways the next chapter can go - have already written one of them, but am just chewing the cud on the others... I hope your muse doesn't munch out half your brain. We need that thing in your head to write stuff. We need you to write. WRITE. WRITE. WRITE. WRITE. Thanks for the view!  |
| 26th Nov 12 Ch: 16 |
YOU KILLED HER, YOU B*TCH! I'LL KILL YOUUUUU! -lunges at you- hows that for inspiring the muse? I spose two faith's doubled the chances of one of them dying. Honestly didnt think it would be the 'original' Faith though. Not sure if I'm sad or angry or indifferent to her death, if she is dead. Who knows what a plaguewalker does to a slayer? I hope everyone else isnt dead. Those golem things seem pretty solid so i cant see them turning to dust. Also starting to get the fact that this Angel isnt such a moaner, so that's cool. Hopefully youre still revved up for writing the next chapter. My |
| 25th Nov 12 Ch: 15 |
So you jumped forward with the whole apocalypse now thing. You really have a fetish for the end of the world dont you? Ballsy move to imply tara might die, but to keep her alive and disfigured? That's just plain mad! The Tara-lovers will hunt you down haha. It's sometimes hard to work out what exactly is going on but ive got a vague idea and the concept of two faiths is a cool one to see play out. I find most of your characters voiced well though Angel could do with some work. "Have i told you how awesome you are" and "bad dudes" dont seem to fit with the lingo of mr broody face. Looking forward to what comes next and to find out what cordelias message was. Author Feedback: I admit I'm rushing a bit. I think I just want to try and get this story finished ASAP, then worry about extensive edits later. So apologies in advance for anything that might poison your eyes. Soweeeeee!  Figured mr broody face was slightly less broody in this dimension, which is also an awesome excuse to wriggle out of the OOC dialogue.  I should probably think about hiding from the Tara lovers. Should also think about a safehouse for the next chapter, though... |
| 24th Nov 12 Ch: 14 |
Sorry its taken me so long to catch up with this story, poppy, procrastination really should be my middle name. And then maybe my first name too. Quite the bleak outlook in this chapter. I thought Tara was to be the next major casualty but it seems shes 'just' live. Did the rage of the readers make you chicken out? interesting monsters by the way. Wonder what they are. Guess ill find out... Author Feedback: First name sounds about right! But Mikey! It's good to hear from you.  The rage of people in secret messages did make me quail a little. I feel ashamed. |
| 24th Nov 12 Ch: 14 |
Sorry its taken me so long to catch up with this story, poppy, procrastination really should be my middle name. And then maybe my first name too. Quite the bleak outlook in this chapter. I thought Tara was to be the next major casualty but it seems shes 'just' live. Did the rage of the readers make you chicken |
| 22nd Nov 12 Ch: 16 |
oh shit what happen no no no this cant no omg. great chap Author Feedback: Your reaction makes me want to write more. Yay for muses! and Thank you |
| 22nd Nov 12 Ch: 16 |
Good chapter, I hope the "real" faith isn't dead, being a slayer may have protected her to some extent.  Author Feedback: We shall see. :3 |
| 22nd Nov 12 Ch: 16 |
 oh come on, your gonna leave us hanging! i hope your not gonna kill off any of the slayers! DAMN! great up-date, please don't make us wait to long for an up-date!  great job!  Author Feedback: I gis you hugs. I'll try not to keep you hanging... |
| 02nd Nov 12 Ch: 15 |
i loved the interaction between faith and angel! that this angel smiles,WoW! buffy and faith#2 were cute together also! did i miss it? what are darkslayer and plaquewalkers? they sound really nasty  don't tell me these terms apply to faith and buffy (dark and light). anyway nice up-date! Author Feedback: Helllllooooo! The Prophecy refers to Slayers as Lightwalkers, so that is Faith and Buffy both, and Darkwalkers are the weird minotaur people that like causing apocalypses. Hope that clears things up!  And yes, this Angel might be a little more smily than the broody one we know about... but not that much.  Thank you for the review |
| 16th Oct 12 Ch: 14 |
glad your muse is back! great up-date also glad to see the inner slayer speaking up, love those little voices. so what were those things? and was that kakisto? is tara going to be alright? god i hope so! this world is SO dark! is anyone going to make it out alive? great to have you back, love this fic Author Feedback: Teehee.  Let's just say no one's life is guaranteed in this world...And your praise makes me squeal. Yay! |
| 16th Oct 12 Ch: 14 |
hot damn that was tense stuff.wow so glad your muse came back from vacation, I always get so excited when I see this story has been updated. Author Feedback: Yes, it's back, and I have the next chapter ready for next week as well - the muse (and fingers!) have been flying! ^^Thannnkkk yooooooouuuuu |
| 17th Aug 12 Ch: 13 |
Hmm, well, some interesting developments there. I wasn't too keen on the Willow/Tara intro but then the screaming and what-not happened outside and its relevance became a little clearer. For a minute I was wondering whether you forgot which pairing you were shipping. So the world is doomed. Who reckons you'll kill a few more characters off by story's end? Would have been nice to see some more Faith/Buffy interaction instead of two doses of Faith...weird how I can see them as separate characters in this...but I suppose you have a plan for what comes next and needed to bridge the gap. Good luck with chapter 14. |
| 11th Aug 12 Ch: 13 |
*really pissed that I can't get my point across with just one word* WHAT Author Feedback: I'm not quite sure how to take this, but yes. Things happening. Lots of things happening. >_> |
| 11th Aug 12 Ch: 13 |
cordy is dead, that sucks! got to wonder what she told faith? will our heroines be able to stop this? what will become of faith,angel, and wesley? stay tuned! very very good up-date! not so long though! Author Feedback: Yeah, I'm already working on 14. Thank joo for teh view! |
| 06th Jul 12 Ch: 12 |
I'm glad uploaded this. I have been anxiously waiting to seek what happens next. A little lost but I'm going to reread the previous chapter. Buffy and Faith's fights foreplay is spot on. Author Feedback: Yay! Apologies for any confusions - feel free to give me a poke if there's anything you might be interested in understanding better. In the meanwhile, thanks for the view :3 |
| 04th Jul 12 Ch: 12 |
An excellent chapter, Poppy. I think you were right to say your biggest strength is description - it really shows. I've noticed it in how you carry a story along, you give a sense of the world outside of what's going on, you describe the right details and leave others scarce and it all fits together in a very appealing manner. I was confused to who the "Seer-bitch" was but then it clicked and the end of this chapter all but confirmed it. Also liked the inclusion of Kakistos; makes sense he'd be around if he never encountered this version of Faith. I think you're building a very solid story and you made Prague feel interesting and realistic instead of feeling out of place in a Buffy story where the norm is to stick with the safe and familiar locales. Part of why your description is so good is the use of words and the research you must do beforehand - or perhaps bluff quite confidently! I think your dialogue is pretty solid too, you're very good at having characters explain pivotal plot points and you do squeeze in the mannerisms and humour effortlessly. There are times it seems a little weaker, like when Buffy was trying to explain why she wasn't mad at Faith, but overall, not shabby at all. I also found Faith's blunt admission that "[she] just wanted Buffy to love her" a bit out of the blue and honest for her character. I did get the sense she meant more of a general kind of love, like friendship or slayer kinship, but you'll have to clarify that for me yourself. Looking forward to what happens next; how Angel reacts with Cordy's death; if Faith will ever meet her dimensional twin; if Buffy will meet her Faith. It's always interesting to see where the next chapter picks up. I'm often surprised. Author Feedback: *Blushes* What a review! It gave me a huge joy squee to read - especially to see you've been picking apart the whole piece. The comments on the dialogue is fairplay about Buffy's reasoning, and Faith's admission - I wanted the dialogues to end with those conclusions, but couldn't fit it in smoothly. Faith's admission was meant to be one of friendship, yes. Also, I think you're the first to actually have it click that Cordelia is dead - the fanfiction.net ones generally asked if she'd be alright And I'm sitting there wondering if I made it too vague... But ah well. Someone noticed! Yay!I'd type more, but honestly, super happy with this review, and the effort put into it. Fantastic. And now I need sleep. Catch you later. |
| 18th May 12 Ch: 11 |
What? No Angel? You had to go and crush my little B/A shipping heart, huh? Lord. I should stop admitting my love for B/A publicly like this before someone kicks me out of the Fuffy club.  Are we going to see Buffy with our Faith? Are we? Are we? *asked in an obnoxious 5 year old voice* I know it would be a little crazy, but I really just wanted Buffy to melt under Faith and go for the smoochies rather than the rage. Damn it, squee. Anyway, another lovely chapter. Eager to see where you head next. Faith inciting Buffy like this will probably blow their cover on that whole 'vamps beat the snot out of me' story, no? Oh! One more comment. If Tara says 'sweetie' one more time, I am going to start praying a demon carves out her tongue. Author Feedback: I apologise for destroying your shipper heart over B/A I can't reveal if our Faith will be meeting up with Buffy, not because I want to be all mysterious with spoilers and stuff, but because I still need to think about whether I want them meeting up or not. *Coughs*About your little crazy over wanting Buffy to sort of melt underneath Faith, let's just say the original end of chapter 11 was drastically different to what you see there now. You can blame my Danish friend for that. Tara does say sweetie a lot, doesn't she? Doh. I'll bear that in mind when I write her in again. Thankoo! |
| 17th May 12 Ch: 11 |
Squeewockle, I'm loving the exchange Buffy and Faith. I can't wait for more. Author Feedback: teehee. |
| 16th May 12 Ch: 11 |
Hello again, stranger. I know I've been a bit M.I.A lately but that Uni work is seriously consuming all of my time. Bring on June 1st already! Anyway, great to see another chapter out of you-I thought it had been a while! Really enjoyed where you decided to pick up from, revealing that some form of peace had been made after Buffy's Hulk-out and that the girls were actually getting along. I think the idea of Buffy getting to question Faith about Faith was quite a cool and unique conversation. Maybe it's something that can be explored again as when reading this you often forget this isn't 'Buffy's Faith'. Curious as to why you decided to have Faith goad Buffy into another rage. Maybe just because Faith likes proving she's the better fighter, and in this dimension she kind of is, or maybe it's her method of therapy for Buffy. Whatever the reason, it all seemed to turn a bit pear-shaped at the end. Not sure which slayer you'll have offering the apologies next chapter. Looking forward to it.Oh and I did notice a typo or two but I'm gonna let you drive your Edit-Goblin persona mad trying to find them. Mwah ah ah ahhhhh. Author Feedback: Its okay, as we established, uni work is waaaaay more important, so when you're ready to come out the shell from it... The conversation between Buffy and this dimension's Faith was supposed to make it clearer about the differences between the two Faiths - or how little difference there is, apart from circumstances only. It was kinda head screwy to write. The little sparring session they went through as well, which accidentally on purpose turned out to be violent - both girls are going to be a little oops about that! I got the idea that Faith was pretty pissed that Buffy was being careful around her, because it suggested in Faith's mind, that Buffy thought she was weak. So Faith sort of let her resentment over that get in the way, because she wanted to prove that she could deal with Buffy in all her psychotic glory. Didn't go exactly to plan. But it kinda did as well. Buffy got conked Thank you for taking the time out of your all important uni course to review, mikey! |
| 16th May 12 Ch: 11 |
Well, that was interesting, slayer foreplay? I don't get it though, one minute faith tells buffy she'll help her get some control the next shes pushing her over the edge?  excited for the next chapter, hope you can post soon! Author Feedback: Faith does want to help Buffy control it, but she also wants to prove she's not in that much danger from Buffy. Buffy sort of annoys her by indicating Faith is weak when they're sparring. I will post soon! :3 |
| 14th May 12 Ch: 10 |
Okay, so here it is. I'm sorry I'm not reviewing every chapter as I read it. I've always been of two minds about leaving reviews. Because authors with works as compelling, engaging and fascinating as this one deserve chapter-by-chapter, blow-by-blow unfiltered glimpses into what their readers are feeling, what they've accomplished by letting me into their world. But reviewing chapter-by-chapter takes me *out* of that world, because instead of diving into the story I wind up sitting on the outside thinking about what I think rather than feeling and getting wrapped up in the story. So consider it a good sign that I haven't reviewed until now, since I read this all in one sitting and am sitting here drooling for more. Squeewockle, let me just say, this AU Sunnydale you've made is FUCKED. UP. Human sacrifices--and it sounds like they're willing sacrifices, which somehow makes it even creepier--in place just to keep the Hellmouth closed that leave a constant patina of guilt on anyone fighting the so-called "good fight". Slayers who seem to be less in control of themselves than they ever were, counterbalanced by the actual straight-up voice of their own Slayer-ness in their heads. Buffy, faced with friends she doesn't actually know and getting a taste of her own medicine when it comes to rejection and paranoia about a dominant Slayer fearing for her title as top dog. Not to mention creepy noncorporeal minotaurs with blades that, if I'm understanding it right, strip the Slayers of their abilities to heal. I like it I like it I like it so much! Oh, and hiding "real" Faith in LA was an interesting touch. I would really like to see her experiences upon waking up in SunnyHell, too (how come they didn't wake up together / in the same vicinity? 0.o) I really like Voirrey as a Watcher, although I have two problems, one being that I have absolutely no idea how to pronounce her name, and the other being that in my head she's voiced by whoever played Gwendolyn Post, the latter of which is clearly a function of her being a lady British Watcher and not at all a function of how you've written here. Which is wonderfully, btw. So yes. Congratulations. I am now officially addicted. Please feed my desperate, feverish, needle-seeking withdrawal so that I can get well. Author Feedback: This review made me squee inside. It makes sense not to review each chapter individually if there's already a few up - it's far easier to get into a story if you're not busy picking apart each chapter.I'm glad to see you like the twisted version of Sunnydale being built up. The Slayers in this world have their powers, but their gifts are not specifically meant to be for humans, so over time, it gets more difficult for them to control. I tried to establish the idea of a conflict between the two Slayers, putting them in opposing roles to Season Three mechanics and Buffy's attempts to integrate into the world - and I'm happy you picked up on that. :3The Wiccans used for the sealing spell are voluntary, yes, but some, when they're sent to seal up the portal, don't fully understand what the spell entails for them. The creepy noncoporeal minotaur doesn't exactly prevent a Slayer from being able to heal - but it does do something a little worse than that. Eek! The reason Real Faith ended up in LA and Buffy ended up in Sunnydale was because these people ended up in the same places they were, back in their other dimension. Buffy ended up in a graveyard, because in her original realm she was in the Initiative compound, and the Initiative doesn't exist in this world. Faith was in LA prison, so when she got pulled into this alternate dimension, she was still stuck in prison - only she was now mysteriously sharing a cell with another prisoner, who probably freaked the hell out when she magically appeared in front of them. A few misunderstandings and head scratchings later, she got released. She also has the niggly Inner Slayer chatting her up as well. Voirrey - Vorry - rhymes with worry, if that helps with pronounciation. The name is an Isle of Man name that traditionally means "Mary." I guess I'll have to put up chapter 11 ASAP now. D: Thank you soooooo much for this review! *Skips off, happy.* |
| 30th Apr 12 Ch: 1 |
Please update soon! I'm on the edge of my seat here... I've been reading these trying to catch up and finally I am! Author Feedback: Chapter 11 is sitting and waiting to be posted, so soooon Glad to hear you're enjoying the fic! |
| 21st Apr 12 Ch: 10 |
Wow Squeewockle, Loved everything The Faith from Buffy's world is the inner slayer talking to her too. Damn please tell me Faith is going to meet her AU self. Buffy seeing both Faiths might put her into.a.catonic state. Naughty ness Buffy being doubled Faithed. One last all the Ringer fans are doing.everything to #SaveRinger please vote non-stop in the Fimal #SaveOneShow round.@eonlineMonday 5am pst. Thx and spread the word Author Feedback: Yes, she has an inner slayer too. Thanks for viewing! |
| 18th Apr 12 Ch: 10 |
Small nit, must pick... Her name was Diana Dormer, not Diane. D: I am really excited to see our Faith! I hope Buffy sees her too. I liked hearing Angel's thought process--he gets Faith so well even when they don't know one another. And bring on the Buffy/Angel reunion, I say. I love a little Bangel as long as it eventually goes Fuffy. I hope Voirrey gets impaled with something, in an extremely fatal place. Also Giles, shut it! Wesley is not a ponce. He is a lovely man! Lovely, I tell you. Author Feedback: Eep meepabeep. Stupid Watcher name! I will do something about that shortly, but I'm tired since I decided to start running through the tv series Bones and its like 2 in the morning and scrolling through the chapter on my blackberry screen makes me scream D: But thanks for pointing that out! If it makes you feel any better, LA Faith doesn't like Voirrey, either. So much hate. Its like you're trying to make me morally obligued to kill her off Also, from the show I always got the impression Giles didn't like Wesley. And in S3, he was a ponce, IMHO. In Angel he became sexy. And rugged. Like a rug. Angel seems very well equipped to understand how Faith works - I'm a fan of the Faith Angel friendship pairing for sure. :wuv: Thanks for peeking! And I'm still all about having to be taken away from the Omegaverse.But I suppose I can spend the reading and reviewing time writing more fics instead. Oh! As a thought - are you considering starting or... *ehem* picking up any fics in the near future? |
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